Editing, PP, Essay 2.

1.-  Journal-  Compare and contrast your favorite sports, movies, or restaurants.

2. Compare and Contrast notes… Essay 2

        Possible Org Plans,

        Paragraph primer…Shaffer Method

1.Introduction-  5-7 sentences.  Last is thesis.

State a problem, explain it further, offer a solution in a thesis.

3-pronged Thesis/Direct Thesis-  A statement of opinion with 3 points.

Implied Thesis-  Intro adds up to an opinion.

2.Body Paragraph-  Supports the thesis.  Uses examples and facts and opinions to prove/explain a point.

3.Body Paragraph

Topic Sentence (O)      :           

Fact:                         : For example,

Opinion                    : This shows that

Opinion                    : This also shows that

Fact                          :  In addition

Opinion                    :  TST

Opinion                    :  TAST

Fact                          :  What’s more

O                        :  TST

O                        :  TAST

Concluding sentence. (O)

4.Body Paragraph

5.Conclusion-  Restates..  5-7 sent.

Thesis:  Topic- F/S

            A:  everyone

           P.  to show soccer is better.

Soccer is a better sport than football-

Thesis

Soccer takes creativity, extreme fitness, and mental focus whereas, in football, players are told what to do, aren’t always fit, and have a break every 15 seconds.

Plan 1

Intro

Creativity/Told what to do

Creativity S/F S/F or C S, S/ F, F

Fitness/Fitness

Focus/Focus.

Conclusion

Plan 2

Intro

Creativity Soccer

Fitness Soccer

Focus Soccer

Creativity Football

Fitness Football

Focus Football

Conc.

Plan 3

Creativity Soccer

·     Player creativity

·     Coach creativity

Creativity  Football

·     Player creativity

·     Coach creativity

FS

·     Cardio

·     Endurance

FF

·     Cardio

·     Strength

FS

·     Constant Focus

·     Intermittent focus

FF

Conc.

3. Groups and editing… RA, first.

Editing list:

Is the MLA format correct?
Circle mistakes.
Is there a purpose?  What is it?
What's the topic?
Would you tell this story to another?
What would you change?
Offer two compliments.

4. Drafting time.

5.  HW-

 Final editing,  reading “The Lottery,”  plus the first set of questions, and “Salvation,” with the first set of questions.